Cycle hire

[Mugshot]

Hi lee, I'll apologise in advance for my pedantry, but I think little details can make a big difference to the preceived professionalism of the site/business.
I'll edit here as I go through if that's ok.

Home page.

It looks as though you have tabbed too far across on your first route suggestion between "1" and "The".
You have missed a space between the full stop and "Suitable".
You have a space between "familys" and the full stop.
You've spelt opportunity wrong.
"stroud" should have a capital S.
You have an extra space between "path" and your comma.
You've spelt multiple wrong.
I think it should be "choices of" not "choice off"
I don't think you need a capital t or h in "The Historic"
You've spelt cathedral wrong.
You've missed a space between the full stop and "On"
It looks as if you have two spaces between "Ample" and "Free"
"Ample" doesn't need a capital.

With regard to lay out, do you think it may look a little neater if, for example, "The Stroud Valleys Pedestrian Cycle Trail" was treated as a heading rather than the start of a sentence.

Lee, would you rather I PM'd these to you?

That ladies and gentlemen was post 100, pedantry, how proud am I!??!

 

[Baggy]

Hi lee, I'll apologise in advance for my pedantry, but I think little details can make a big difference to the preceived professionalism of the site/business.

......

That ladies and gentlemen was post 100, pedantry, how proud am I!??!

 

[mcr]

Lee - another apology for pedantry. I've been editing magazine copy all morning so am in the swing of it! I'll leave others to advise on design, but if it's useful, here's an edited copy-and-paste of your prices page with suggested rewordings in red. If I get a chance, I'll try and do the same for other pages.

My only other comment is that, personally, I'd want to see upfront what sort of bikes are on offer, preferably with pictures - road, touring, hybrid, mtb etc.

Matthew


Hire Prices
Cycle Hire Prices

DA deposit is required on all hiresrentals. Any off the following are accepted, and will be retained for the length of the hirerental. All deposits shallwill be kept in our shop safe.

• If using our car park, car keys may be left
• Driving licence or passport
• £40 cash

Tool kit and lock are all included in the price.

Helmets and high visibility vest's are recommended and available on request.



Adult Child under 16 Child under 10 Tag along Single trailer Double trailer Per hour

£3
£2.50
£2 £2 £2 £3 Day,8 hours £12 £9 £6 £7 £7 £9 half day,4 hours £9 £5 £4 £4 £4 £5 Try something different.: KMX Tornado F3, - £5 per hour.

Discount for group bookings.

Long-term hire is available, - contact us for a quotation.prices negotiated on request.

During school holidays a booking is advisedadvisable.

If you have a booking and are running late, please phone, as any cycles not collected at agreed time may be released.

Edit: damn - I missed the grocer's 'vest's'!

 

[Baggy]

My only other comment is that, personally, I'd want to see upfront what sort of bikes are on offer, preferably with pictures - road, touring, hybrid, mtb etc.

Agreed, that's a good idea.

Good luck with your venture!

 

[Mugshot]

LMAO

 

[mcr]

Cycle Hire


Fully open 1st March 2012

Cycle Hire - a great day out for all the family.



Mo's Bike Shed, The Gatehouse, Bonds Mill, Stonehouse, GL10 3RG

We are situated on the Sstunning Cotswold cCanal.



Recommended Cycle rRoutes

1. The Stroud Valleys Pedestrian Cycle Trail runs from Stonehouse to Nailsworth along a disused railway line. This 6-mile route offers safe cycling with level gradients. Suitable for familysies.
2. The Cotswold Canal Tto Stroud,: head left on the tow path, directly outside shop, and follow the canal to viewsee/reach some stunning views of the surrounding area. This 4.5-mile route offers safe cycling with a few inclines, and at the end the oppeortunity to look around sStroud town.
3. The Cotswold Canal, joining Tthe Gloucester-Tto-Sharpness Canal,: heading right on the tow path, this route gives you a mulitaplemultiple choice off places to visit, including Saul MarniaMarina, Slimbridge WWT, Purton Ship Graveyard, and The Historic Gloucester Docks. Gloucester Cathedral is then just 5 minutes' then 5 mins cycle from the docks Gloucester Catherdral.

Located Mminutes from J13 of the M5. O, on Bonds Mill Estate GL10 3RG

with Aample FREE parking

 

[lee morris]

Hi lee, I'll apologise in advance for my pedantry, but I think little details can make a big difference to the preceived professionalism of the site/business.
I'll edit here as I go through if that's ok.

Home page.

It looks as though you have tabbed too far across on your first route suggestion between "1" and "The".
You have missed a space between the full stop and "Suitable".
You have a space between "familys" and the full stop.
You've spelt opportunity wrong.
"stroud" should have a capital S.
You have an extra space between "path" and your comma.
You've spelt multiple wrong.
I think it should be "choices of" not "choice off"
I don't think you need a capital t or h in "The Historic"
You've spelt cathedral wrong.
You've missed a space between the full stop and "On"
It looks as if you have two spaces between "Ample" and "Free"
"Ample" doesn't need a capital.

With regard to lay out, do you think it may look a little neater if, for example, "The Stroud Valleys Pedestrian Cycle Trail" was treated as a heading rather than the start of a sentence.

Lee, would you rather I PM'd these to you?

That ladies and gentlemen was post 100, pedantry, how proud am I!??!

cheers pm away,
im not the best at spelling an punc.. so all help is very welcome

 

[Mugshot]

cheers pm away,
im not the best at spelling an punc.. so all help is very welcome

I'll get them through to you as soon as I can, I'll jot down what I spot although I'm not suggesting that I'm prefect.